HealthCare Paper


I need an essay critiquing a statement. is it possible? I have attached the statement and the assignment which outlines how it should be written. It is 500 words. Also the reference list at the end.


Critique of Position Statement

The position statement is well structured. The author begins with an introduction, which provides an overview of his position on a healthcare issue. In this case, the position is that advances in telemedicine and health informatics are beginning to bring about greater access to healthcare resources particularly to people living in rural areas. The body of the paper explains aspects of health informatics and telemedicine fairly well. The paper also has a conclusion, which provides a succinct reiteration of the author’s position. Moreover, the author reiterates throughout the paper that those advances may be accompanied by some disadvantages but which are by far outweighed by the advantages.


The position statement provides a lot of information that is relevant to the topic. Examples include data comparing health care access by rural and urban populations, ongoing efforts by the Australian government to introduce health informatics and telemedicine, as well as data on how informatics management has contributed to an increase in access to healthcare services by aboriginal patients. Another noteworthy point is that the statement has examined the issue in light of national competency standards for registered nurses. Some of the issues highlighted in the standards the author has mentioned include confidentiality, collaboration among health team members, and professional development.

Some of the references used to explain the position are current and credible but others are not. The source of data on access to medical practitioners by rural and urban populations is credible but not current. It was published in 2008. Readers may perhaps be interested in getting more recent data on access to healthcare. Another source, The New South Wales Rural Doctors Network (2012), is both current and credible. One of the sources (The Law Reform Commission) has no date, meaning that it is not credible. Nevertheless, the author has made an excellent job of looking for credible and current sources such as Bryce (2013), Hovenga et al. (2010), Olesen (2012, and World Health Organization. (2010).

Meanwhile, I think the author may have left out some important information in stating his position. For example, he does provide an elaborate comparison between the costs of introducing health informatics and telemedicine and its benefits in terms of greater access to health care among Australians living in rural areas. For example, installing these systems is an expensive undertaking, and systematic reviews on their cost-effectiveness have yielded contradictory findings (Armfield, Edirippulige, Bradford & Smith, 2014). Moreover, the statement does not address how the problem of shortage of medical professionals in rural areas may be cured through the introduction of advanced health informatics and medicine. Thus, one cannot rule out a situation where many new medical technologies are installed at a high cost only for the government to realize that there are no adequate medical professionals to operate them. In some rural areas, especially those with poor access to electricity and internet access, installing those technologies may be a challenge to begin with, but the author does not mention that.

The author has indicated that informatics management has already contributed to a 143 percent increase in healthcare access by aboriginal patients. He has also stated that health informatics and telemedicine technology is expensive to set up and operate, with the latter attracting hourly charges amounting to $117. By the same token, he should have provided a justification of the benefits of increased access to healthcare among aboriginal patients by demonstrating that the high operational costs do not become a burden to the Aboriginal population over the long term. For instance, empirical research evidence shows that although telemedicine may be cost-effective for on-call hospitals and home care, its application in the delivery of primary care at the local level has yielded mixed results (Wade, Karnon, Elshaug & Hiller, 2010).


Armfield, N., Edirippulige, S., Bradford., N. & Smith., A. (2014). Telemedicine — is the cart being put before the horse? The Medical Journal of Australia, 200(9), 530-533.

Bryce, J. (2013). Let’s talk telehealth. Australian Nursing Journal, 20(7), 112-125

Hovenga, E., Kidd, M., Garde, S. & Cossio, C. (2010). Health informatics: An overview. Online.

Olesen, K. (2012). Informatics: An essential role for nurses. Australian Nursing Journal, 20(3), 19-32.

The New South Wales Rural Doctors Network (2012). NSW rural doctors’ network: Annual report 2011 – 2012. Online.

Wade, V., Karnon, J., Elshaug, A. & Hiller, J. (2010). A systematic review of economic analyses of telehealth services using real time video communication. BMC Health Services Research, 10, 233-241.

World Health Organization. (2010). Telemedicine opportunities and development in member states. Online.

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